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excellent excellent again. Your poems really touch me and control my emotions so well.
Every time you act like you don’t see
I’m ghost
a ghost?
When your memory is all that’s keeping me sane
From I’m a ghost
for I'm a ghost?
But can a ghost die,
From I’ve been killed before
Under your covered eyes.
"from" again, instead of "for".
Yet why, for every time you ignore my memory
Does it feel like its breaking?
it's breaking.
etc.
damn i think i'm under siege. I have always had trouble with grammar. You should see how many green lines their are in the books in write on word. I'm good with words not apostrophes
Did you at least like this one better?
I did enjoy this poem a bit more, yes, but your work is just not for me.